Posted by Tensing If you'd got the tensing right this could have been a really good story. Think first type later!"!
Posted by John
Dear M's Grey
We found your story neet and short
but lacking a preteen girl wanting
to fallow in Camilles footsteps.Not
having a father the child would do
any thing to be excepted by Gene.
John & Robin
Posted by don't matter tense! half was past, half was present and half was future l[(how u managed to do that i don't know) and yes i relise that's 3 halves!!!] i stopped halfway thru cuz i couldn't make sense of tenses!!!
Posted by king kong bit short and boring really