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Posted by demi borlas
i love it it makes me wanna masturbate!!!!
Posted by Killer_Klown
well id have to say this story is ok id give it a 7 on a scale of 1-10 it does need a little improvement but otherwise its a great story could be longer but it still got me off
Posted by Steve
Good story, got me hard!
Posted by ken
oh yes....the huge boobs of the prim and proper librarian. a very good topic but it could have remained more feasible and thus possible.
the librarian puts a washcloth to the bleeding head of a dude with a concussion? there has to be a better way to start this affair.
the naivite of the choirboy library assistance relishing in the knowledge of books suddenly becomes a bad boy groping at will? make it real.
Posted by Jay
while being descriptive about the sexual escapades of a couple of teenagers with an older woman, it lacks some polish and is distinctly noteworthy of improvement... that's what they make a spell checker for! The gramatical errors, take away from the storyline...
I give it a D minus.
Posted by sabrina
Stephanie:
Your story, while plausible, could use some improvement.
Try re-writing it in the first person, in the present tense, and refrain from using quotations unless you can achieve writing to a higher standard. Use descriptive narratives and describe a conversation as though you’d been listening with your main character’s ears.
Example: Quote Ryan came into the office and seemed to hesitate, as if he was very nervous. "Yes," she intoned? Unquote.
Re written as: Quote Ryan entered her office and nervously hesitated. Her stern yet positive demand to know what he wanted, made Ryan stutter more intensely. Unquote
Posted by Mickey D
you should try to write these storys from one of the characters perspective. instead of always writing as if your a camera in the room watching the story.it would be a hell of a lot more sexy that way. you are hung up on quotations i can see. its a sex story your writing here. you may want to try and remember that. your story ideas are alright but you seem as if your trying to be a profesional writer instead of conveying the story as an expierience.not hot at all.quit trying to act educated.your not anyway, or if you are its getting in the way of your writing. so tell the story as it would happen.not some poorly written playboy version of it.you do that with all your storys.drop most of the qoutation it doesnt make you sound smart if thats what your trying to achieve.the words tell the story not the commas and periods.
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