Posted by G. Lucas I really like this story, obviously, lol. Could you do me a favor and check out my stories, just tell me when you write another one and I'll check it out for you too.
Posted by A. Johnson Great story. I really liked all of the detail.
Posted by rock good story made me wish i was there.
Posted by The One Nice story, liked it a lot, hope for a sequel. Note though, watch your grammer and spelling, type it first in Word or whatever to make sure it's right.
Posted by Alex well done! excellant work for your first time, i hope to see some progression from here! bravo bravo! :P
Posted by thanks again Liz thank you all so much. of course i will read your stories and will greatly aprechate (sorry) reading mein sory about the spelling and grammer mistakes i am the worlds worst speller but i am working on it
Posted by asd;flkjsad; asd;flajsdf;lkj Learn the proper use of grammar, how to spell, and not to make run-on sentences. You used the word "suppressed" for "surprised." A basic 6th grade education would do a lot for you.
Posted by Katie Great story. A little annoyed with the description of how things tasted.
It's summer time and Mackenzie is bringing her friend home for vacation. Lena curiously notices her brother and has naughty thoughts about him. Could he be thinking the same?