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Posted by Candace
Man, write a sequel to this story. It's real good and I'm about to read it over again later on. You did a great job writing this story. Do a sequel.
Posted by den
very good, but I think you mixed up Jenn and Mary a couple of times
Posted by bob joset
this was an excellent story i would give it one of the highest ranks
Posted by LucOuarm
Maybe too much action to be believable. The third person point of view and lack of dialogue prevent it from being really lively.
Posted by John Lakes
Thanx for your replies. I appreciate it. I'm glad it was not too bad.
Posted by someone
story was good, you just need to pay more attention to the names. You got Jenn and Mary mixed up a lot. Other than that, pretty good
Posted by h
names were messed up, it got very confusing as to who was where and what was going on.
please write it in the past tense. then it is someone recounting a story, and not like a sports announcer.
but i still likes it.
Posted by Long John
For a first time story I thougth is was pretty good.
A little confusing at times. And the third person scenerio was kinda dumb. I suggest writing first person stories. Like you are the one the action is happening to. And more dialog between characters. Actuall talking to each other in quotes. And maybe mark and John could have done some stuff to each other. Just a thought:)
Posted by x
Good story, just need to check spelling and grammer...It lost my attention for a moment each time I had to figure out what you were really trying to say
Posted by jon
GREAT stiry...there were a few problems wid transitions, but all in all....it wasa grate plot...also fix up some of the grammar....
Posted by Chris
i really enjoyed this story, a few grammer problems but all in all it was very good. i would like to read part two if you would be kind enough to write it......
Posted by John Lakes
Part 2, Well, I've been busy, and this story was really easy to write because it was in my head for a week, so I pretty much jotted it down. Yeah I guess I didn't spend enough time proof reading it, I wrote it, put it in Microsoft Word, did spell check and grammer, then pasted it back for submit. Next time I will proof read, hehe, my bad, By the time I was finished with it I just wanted to submit it and goto bed. I'm glad you guys liked it, I'll see about a part 2 after I'm done with all this school crap. Summer is soon, so I should be able to write down the second one. It's just not really fresh in my head because of all this school stuff, so I don't think it would be as good as this one. I'm glad you guys liked it and I'm sorry again for not taking time to proof read it. If I can edit it, maybe I'll do that in a little bit as well.
Posted by keri like the lotion
the story was very good. i even started to enjoy it a little to much but as i read on there was to much going on and lost the feeling to much to be belivable i say leave the last guy out mark and it would be awsome. good luck keep on writing
Posted by Billy
writer could not keep the names straight
Posted by dfdf
fuck you it sucks
Posted by jerry
pleas write anoter one
Posted by jerry
pleas write anoter one
Posted by xak
one of the best i read man it was awsome please write another one
Posted by ShyB
cool story!! i did have to read it twice but i did like it when i found out what was going on!!
i hope you write sequel!! look forward to seeing it!!
Posted by kimosabe
ohhhlalala
Posted by jjjfukgfuy
it was good got a little confusing after a wile and you should use more discription than 69 and what have you
Posted by David
simply put, the best!
Posted by anonymous
fukkin great story.
Posted by robo
really hot action great stuff
Posted by joe
it was pretty good
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