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Posted by Moose
I liked the story, BUT, this person REALLY needs to learn proper english. It was so hard to figure out what they wanted to say. Nice story, but, due to the bad english, I only gave it a 2.
Posted by nightowlpunk
I liked the story myself, byt PLEASE use spell check next time. It took quite a bit away from the story.
Posted by Brian
I agree with the first and second guy..... The story had a good line, but if you asked this person to spell ID, they'd have major trouble. Looks like ebonics.
Posted by Junta
SPELL CHECK!!!
I read 2 paragraphes and I couldn't go on. I'm sure it's a good story, but got too distracted with the spelling mistakes.
Posted by bubba
learn to use the spell checker, dude
Posted by Mike Hunt
Good story! but if there was one thing wrong: USE A FUCKING SPELL CHECKER! IM SITTING HERE ON A FRIDAY NIGHT AFTER A EXAM, AND I DONT WANT TO FUCKING DECIPHER A PAPER. But beside that, it was pretty good
Posted by Shadow
nice story man but with all those mispellings it lost something.try pressing that little icon that says spell check.
Posted by billy
lol damm guys give the lad a break, he's trying, as a story it is FANTASTIC...bit more descirtive maybe (sorry but i love detail) and well yea spell check but it wasn't THAT hard to work out lazy sods
Posted by Vixen
It WAS hard to figuer out, I only read about a pargraph and decided "Right, I'm gonig to spell check this fucking thing myself"! So I'm gona send the corrected version to the author. Hopefully they can get a READABLE version on the site
Posted by David Martin
Very Nice story but hard to read, you need a spell checker badly.
Posted by Damn you suck
this story suck balls...learn to spell, retard
Posted by Grumble
I am sorry but after the first few lines I gave up.
The spelling was so bad I just couldn't go on. I mean when you write "muscically" instead of "muscly" it turns it into a farce.
I ave some constructive advice though, get someone to edit it for you
Posted by manga
this is a lovely first time, fuck story where's 2
Posted by Steve
I hope your still in school there are more misspelled words in this story then I could count
Posted by Tilly
You need to improve on your spelling and grammar skills... i found it pretty hard to read... go back to school!
Posted by arun
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Posted by Cool Fuel
Can' get past all the spelling and grammar problems. This story is unreadable. Get an editor.
Posted by dec
ok the spelling wasn't that hard to work out, but what i'm more interested in is why are you using your grandmother's email?
Posted by Nia
I absolutely loved this story!! It wasn't THAT hard trying to figure it out... I really loved this story!! I wanna print it out and just keep it.. It was pretty good length(could be longer.)but that's just me. I really liked it! Can't wait for you to write more!! Note:you should write it in a Word Document ten click spell check. Spell check it then copy and paste it here! Lol the red sqwigglie line underneath the word means spelling error and the green one means grammar.. Just to help you out alittle
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