Posted by ac this has to be the most pathetic thing i have ever read. i found it absolutly hillarious though, was that the authors object? oh, oh, i do so not hope so, i might make his life more complex! i'm gonna go jump off a bridge now! bye bye!
Posted by ac ouch, sorry, i was way to harsh there. but i just honestly didn't like it. i really need to tone down my attitude a bit, sorry mate, but the story DEFINITLY wasn't my thing, but even so, i was outta line and waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too harsh. sorry buddy.
Posted by trendy carpet This story seemed to be a bit slow in getting moving. Also, just when things start to get interesting the story ends. The writing wasn't bad quality at all. I would just have liked a little bit more of it. It seemed to end rather prematurely. There are some good descriptions in it and it is an interesting premice, but far to thin to be a good story. Overall: the first page of a good story!