Posted by Buffy I honestly think you could draw this out into maybe a romance novel, it seems you have the talent.
Posted by Gina Why, thank you! I have written several short stories before now, some erotic some not. Never thought to publish them though.
Posted by Peter It was a hot story. Please write more for us to read. It is the first story that I have read about a virgin being de-flowered. It brought back memories of the virgin that I once fucked.
Posted by jonathan i like your story i would like you to write more.
Posted by Lisa WOW that was amazing you should continue writing this story it was the best one yet!!
Posted by Gina With luck, the addition will be posted soon. Hope you enjoy!
Posted by daniella Omg that was breath taking! i got the best chills reading this u really can write well and describe exactly how a woman wants to be touched.. sigh.. i wish i had a sea man thing! please do write more!!
Posted by Gina i don't think i like my next installment very much, but i already submitted it. So we shall see. :)
Posted by X_planet_ocean_monster The environment, the ocean, the ornamentation mixed with the x-animal of science fiction and together with the first carnal experience of a virgin culminated with the painful orgasm. This is perhaps the precis or the epilogue. I liked it.
Posted by Rika I have to say, out of all the stories I've read on here this one has the most taste to it. I love the story line ^_^
Posted by Raeann Loved it!!! Read the second one loved it to!! Please write more.
Posted by superman Omg this was amazing. Im a dude and it reminded me of deflowering my girlfriend(soon to be wife) and this... im not even sure what to call it but its awsome. I have read all three of ur stories and I like this one and the instalment the best. I vote yes on u making these into a erotic novel! Hey this may seem wierd but I kinda got a request kinda... maybe u could do something with a girl and angel? Im into that kinda stuff. I consider myself like an angel(not the normal thought of an angel though) and I hope u can help me out. If not that's ok but awesome writing skill. Best of luck
-ur fan superman
Posted by superman By the way if anyone clicks on my email to email me jus let me say its not real. I jus made it up to post a rewiew. That's all :-)
Posted by Gina Superman, that idea definately appealed to me to write an angel story, though it may not be what you are expecting. I have however submitted the story for review, with two more parts as follow-up. It will be the same with that one, as it is with this one, I need positive reviews to write more. I don't want to just keep writing something that nobody reads, though it sounds like that isn't a problem so far.
Posted by Sexy bitch I personally loved this story. Very interesting, turn it into a book and I would read it!
It is a story of the coercion of a young lady, Rachel, to fulfill the sexual desires of her older Guardian. In order to gain the inheritance that is rightfully hers, she must consent to be trained by the Headmaster to service her Guardian. She will be taught to experience pleasure against her own will and to give pleasure against her will. She will be trained in all the perversions of the flesh...