Posted by Jackie What in the sam hell is this? It doesn't even make sense.
My god.
Posted by Liz (what's a sam hell? jeez, where are YOU from??? J/k) :)
But yes, that was pretty bad.
Posted by LucOuarm Made sense to me. Perhaps the many spacing and punctuation errors caused some confusion. Otherwise a nice story.
Posted by NVSBlues The story showed real potential, but I got the feeling you were tired of typing and rushed it--should've hit the brakes a bit and eased through. Otherwise good effort!
Posted by Mel In a word...crap!
Posted by Lickablewomen Ok for all thoes who have read this and though it was bad.. I dont think it was bad at all. it was a great story.. I enjoyed.. Try and put urself in the story next time.. I wish i could have been there to give and take a few lessons..... Thanks for the wonderful storys.. If you have any more u would like to share please let me know..
Posted by Noelle I thought it was good too...just a fantasy. Oh how I like those LOL...
Posted by s nelson great story