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Posted by Jackie
Once again, you have a decent storyline, but i think you tend to rush things. Let the story flow and dont be in a rush to post it.
You have a few rough spots but no biggie. Your doing just fine. Keep writing and you will get better.
Posted by ac
very nicely done. well written, grammer and spelling was good, nice storyline. it was a little confusing in some parts, make sure to clearly present each character, not so they just 'appear' and make it clear who is talking/thinking. and i agree with jackie about your 'rushing', allow the plot and and characters (and inevitably, the relationship) develop. i suggest playing around with your style, maybe try a series method with continuous developments to the plot and characters (and once again, relationship) or maybe write one big thing which covers a large majority of the relationship, or play arund with the short story method you are using at the moment. as jackie said, your're doing great buddy, keep writing, keep experimenting and you'll get there.
-ac-
Posted by Whitney
Thank you.. I realized after I wrote it and posted it that I rushed it, but by then it was too late to change it so I just left it alone and began work on the next. I appreciate your honest feedback and the biggest compliment I get is that people don't come on saying they "got off" on it. I want to write stories not sex manuals.
Posted by Jess
to whitney:yeah uve definatly got the write attitude keep it goin'
to ac: I think u definatly have a career in english teaching...lol
count your self lucky whitney, u should have seen her review for autum leaves! lol...:-)
Posted by ac
why do people keep saying that?
Posted by Jess
sorry no offence lol...
Posted by ac
nah, not offended mate. but i guess it come from the fact that i'm a total perfectionist the way i can be over-critical of other peoples work. if anybody ever wants me to shut up just let me know, i wont, but at least i'll know.
Posted by Jess
Noooo! dont shut up!
i almost allways agree with ur reviews, i just find dem funny like you can be botherd to write that much,i mean 5 lines is my limitation, and as for being a perfectionist, ive sort of given up on that, ill just write any old thing and see what the outcome is, lol if my parents could see me right now thed be like OOOO JESS DARLING WE TRIED FOR AGES TO GET U TO A LEADING GRAMMER SCHOOL IN LONDON!
but err im like hello the snottey nose posh brats in there were a thick as two short planks, and my teacher just sorta gave up on grammer, its quite astonishing when i came outader with an A for my gcse(dont know if u guys know bout dem, der exams u take when ur 16)
so err good day well its probably night time in aussie land lol...
byeee
Posted by RACHEL HEBERT
VERY ROMANTIC STORY...GREAT CHANGE OF PACE..LOVED IT
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