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Interlude reviews
Posted by PUSSY LOVER
OKAY, WHAT THE HELL IS UP WITH THIS DAMN STORY!! IT'S NICE THAT YOUR TRYING TO MAKE IT SOUND BETTER WITH ALL THESE METAPHORS AND COMPLICATED WORDS, BUT ARE YOU TRYING TO TELL A STORY OR GIVE A DAMN VOCABULARY LESSON!! WE DON'T WANT ALL THE "OH SHIT I NEED A DICTIONARY" WORDS, WE WANT THE "GET DOWN TO IT, SIMPLE, UNDERSTANDABLE WITHOUT GETTING A HEADACHE" WORDS. MAKE YOUR STORY SIMPLE, BUT INTERESTING AND DESCRIPTIVE. ALL THESE BIG, HARD TO UNDERSTAND WORDS AND METAPHORS ARE MAKING THE STORY BORING. DON'T BE SCARED TO SAY NASTY WORDS LIKE DICK, PUSSY, CLIT, SUCKING, NIBBLING, YOU KNOW WHAT I'M GETTING AT, BECAUSE THAT'S WHAT MAKE YOU WANT TO READ ON! IM NOT SAYING BE TOO NASTY, BUT HIGHLY SEXUAL WITH WORDS EVERYONE UNDERSTAND. THE REAL NASTY STORIES GET ME OFF, NOT THE BORING ONES. THANKS YOUR A DOLL!
Posted by Jackie
Okay, your not powerone. Quit trying to use the whole "master-slave" thing. Save it. Lesbians aren't into that shit.Also, i agree with the above review. People want read the story without having a dictionary in thier lap.
Posted by Liz
Pretty words. go write poetry- or a college dissertation and get out of the lesbian section.
Posted by ac
is anybody into master-slave shit?
Posted by liz
soft s/m is one thing. master-slave is just a little far. i'm sure there are plenty of normal lesbians that do like master-slave, and i'm just not one of them.
Posted by ac
oh yeah, i'm totally ok with soft s/m, but when it's done between couples, not, hi, how are ya? i'm gonna tie you up and make you like my snatch. that's definitly not ok. that's actually quite disgusting.
Posted by sara
BORING, i couldnt even finish the story
Posted by Nikki
I have to agree- simple language is the best- and this is coming from someone who doesn't need a dictionary to understand all those words and metaphors. It's just that when you're using metaphors like that I think of my Anthro Class.. or maybe a Sex Therapist trying to explain it. I agree with what other people said - you need to use clear language, clear words- dirty words. Your metaphors and large words and stuff make everyone have to think too hard about what you're trying to say instead of getting themself off. There's just not much room to fantasize when you're wondering halfway through if this story is a sex story or a safari... It's ok to use one or two metaphors, but when the WHOLE thing is a metaphor, that's a little much.
Posted by ummm very gay
I absolutely loved it
Posted by disturbed
Umm whats with all the metaphors? Dosent anyone ever do just straight hardcore fucking anymore? By the way I know a lot of lez and WE do not do the slave thing it is kinda out of are league.
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