I don't think i have ever read a more romantic, emotional, erotic story! Do all of us nice queer girls a favor and write some more!
Posted by Liz Holy shit was that awesome!!!!
I don't think i have ever read a more romantic, emotional, erotic story! Do all of us nice queer girls a favor and write some more!
Posted by Liz Holy shit was that awesome!!!!
I don't think i have ever read a more romantic, emotional, erotic story! Do all of us nice queer girls a favor and write some more!
Posted by Liz Was that awesome or what? i have never read a more romantic, emotional, or erotic story than this one. Do all of us nice queer girls a favor and write another.
oh yeah, but Alanis Morisette kicks ass :)
Posted by liz this story is the most fucking awesome romantic/love/emotional/erotic story i have ever read. Keep writing stories like this one for us nice queer girls. It's a rare gem.
and alanis morisette rocks by the way. but i'm entitled to my opinion :)
Posted by Cheryl I think that the story had a very wonderful point. I am also a lesbian, but didn't come out until I met the LOVE OF MY LIFE. I tried to ignore it at first, but I couldn't handle the thought of not being with her and being true to my feelings. I don't know how to describe it. From the moment I met her she has lite up my LIFE. Reading this story made me feel like I could take her in my arms and never let her go. Thank You So Much.
Posted by Erin Wow. Your a really good writer. You can definatly tell that. It stands out in the story. Your really real and i love it. Write more. Oh and awsome taste in music.
Posted by Haden Wow. Your a really good writer. You can definatly tell that. It stands out in the story. Your really real and i love it. Write more. Oh and awsome taste in music.
Posted by New Writer Thanks for the feedback...I've submitted some small modifications to this story...added one more scene...it'll probably be updated soon. And yes, I've got another story going on...this one is set in India.
Posted by Cheryl Keep up the good work new writer. Would like to read your next story. Hope it is as good as this one was. This story was very interesting and like I said before it was wonderfuly put together.
Posted by Kevin Sounds like I'm the only guy to give your story a review.I loved it.Of course I'm turned on by lesbian sex,but no matter the content of the story,it is up to the writer to entertain and arouse the reader.I sense that sexually arousing your readers was not your point.I was fascinated with the Jodie and Karen and their sweet and sometimes stormy relationship.Your story was a wonderful change from the raw carnality of many of stories on this site.Yeah,I'm a guy but I appreciate writing skills,and you are simply terrific.Thanks,Kevin
Posted by brand new writer Liz, Thanks for your feedback. I actually don't dislike Alanis Morissette but I think she's overrated and got more attention than a lot of other better women in rock. The songs of hers that I really like are probably the ones that rarely got attention; "Not The Doctor" is probably the one I liked the most. Okay, okay, no debating.
Posted by Daniel Very touching story! I wish more of the stories on the net could be so realistic! The reality, unfortunately, is that gay and lesbian couples have a really hard life. I am a straight guy, but if I wasnt a guy I would definitely be a lesbian. My relationships are always very emotional, which is almost always untrue with all of my friends. I also love giving oral sex, which is completely opposite of my friends. I am always very sensual too... basically I fit into the common stereo-type for lesbians. Please write more stories like this, its really the best story I've ever read!
Posted by Liz that's awesome. sorry my browser kept sending my messages- damned issue with that. I can't wait for your next story. great job!!!
Posted by Jay hi. I want to add with all the other comments that your story was off the hook. Seriously. I am wide read in these types of stories and i know a good one when i read it. I am straight, BUT, i think i may be bi, but hey, if i ever make the move or someone special finds me, i hope my relationship is as passionate as Jodie and Karen.
Posted by meredith Excellent story! It was long but the length just made it more exciting to read on. I hope that you and your girlfriend have the best of luck in whatever you guys do. rock on.
Posted by DropN Fantastic story! Very realistic. As young lesbian it gives me hope. Thanks for writing this story.
Posted by am That was such an excellent story, i am able to relate to many parts in that story and it just brings back good memories. so thank you for that.
Posted by Alli I really loved your story because it actually mirrors my life. I know my sexual orientation but I choose to live a heterosexual lifestyle because I couldn't handle the pressures of being a lesbian. Thank your for a story that accurately reflects the pleasure, pain, frustration, and reality of same sex relationships.
Please keep writing.
Posted by brand new writer God, I'm a little overwhelmed by the feedback I've gotten, not to mention mail. :-) Thanks a bunch. Yes, I will keep writing. I do have another story in the works...I don't want to give away too much about what it's about. Just wait a few weeks, it'll be up. Thanks again.
Posted by Reader Way to go girl. If I were you, I would take a bit more time on the thier first "brush" , cutt out thier "making out" a little bit, and make a movie out of it. Sure it wont be "Streets of phelidelphia" but defninitly a good one. This aint no sex story this is art. keep on writing. I will look out for more work from you. Thanx and good luck.
Posted by gabriel you should write a book....or a lot of books....quickly, so i can buy absolutely all of them! that story was fucking awesome, i don't think i've ever read a better-stated, more emotionally involved piece. gorgeous blend of the erotic and the day-to-day...and by the way, your music taste is fabulous. good luck to you!
Posted by Robin We need MORE stories like that on this site! Absolutely realistic and touching!
Posted by Notinthemoodnow Wow ! Being a lesbian I can see where your coming from.Your story was great.My gf told me about this one alot better then others we have read here.Thanks and goodluck
Posted by Amat thank you for this wonderful down to earth story. It's a nice change. The music is awesome.
Posted by K I just finished reading your story and i must say it was great! it is like a good book you have to keep turning the pages to see what will happen. its way better than other stories just on sex as it had the emotional side which is real life.
i loved it!
Posted by Nikki Hey there. I must say that was great. What can I say it fuckin kicks ass. I loved the way ya put in music. I fuckin love punkrock and I guess music is a huge part in our lives. Well ya said "if we dun make music music makes us" well I do both and I find it an important feature. To tell ya the truth I cant fuck without the right rythms. Write more of this kinda stuff an I have every pleasure readin it:-)
Posted by atruefan wow, u r amazing. seriously, wow. i love the way you let music help tell the story, i myself play several instruments and am in a jazz band cuz i love n e upbeat, feel good music that, like jazz, just lifts you. chart toppers will come and go, but the true hits will live forever, and god, so will this story...
Posted by sum1 dat was pretty dam gud 2..o yea..and about de endin...well i got 4 words for dat 1..dat u've mentioned in u'r other 1..lol'z.."fuk the status quo"!!!!!!!!!!!...o yea..and i'm guessin aapko ye tho bolna aata hai na?..tho phir..aap hai kha sai?..hope ya get dat..o yea and i figure u wun't say here..so..hmm..drop me a clue..sumwhere..yea can't wait 4 u'r nxt 1..l8rz.. new writer
Posted by Chris Great story! Very interesting and well-written. Plus, your grammar is really good, which makes reading your story all the more enjoyable. I hope you write again soon.
Posted by ac Just relised i havn't posted a review for this one. You rock hunni.
Posted by Karen I just wanted to say I love this story and that it made me think about gay life and how it feels for most people. Thanks for a great story.
Posted by JoEllen WOW, now that was a great story. sorry that things happened the way they did but that is life.
Posted by Susan loved your story...it was great..very emotional, sensual and loving....
Posted by meen So it's true, not all lesbian-orented stories on the net are overloaded with the overly exploited world of "fuckery". I'm 17 and still in the throes of an identity crisis; debating on where I stand and what I stand for.
This story was truly an eye opener. If only we'd get to read more works like these. It brings me a step closer to the truth.
And yes, I hear you when you say "incapable of thinking wihtout music in her ears." ;]
Keep It Up.
Posted by meen So it's true, not all lesbian-orented stories on the net are devoid of EMOTION. I'm 17 and still in the throes of an identity crisis; debating on where I stand and what I stand for.
This story was truly an eye opener. If only we'd get to read more works like these. It brings me a step closer to the truth.
And yes, I hear you when you say "incapable of thinking wihtout music in her ears." ;]
Keep It Up.
Posted by Rachel I dont know if this comment will count amoug the endless amount of complements you have recived but truely your story has had a big impact on my life i really made me come to tearms with my feelings for other wommen and i thank you greatly for that, all i have to say is sit down on your computer a write a book! man you would truly be a millionare
thanks so much for this (-: !!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by heather thats amazing...i dont think it could have been told any better...its been a while since i read the first segment of this story but is this true?...if it is i know your pain maybe not totally because im still only 15...but damn...thats deep...amazing...utterly amazing
Posted by Sima I loved it .... really ... I read this sotry in the morning...(well half of it because i had to go to school) ..anyway ...all i could thing on my lessons was this story .. i couldn't wait to get back at home and finish to read :) .... and when i finished it, i was with a big smile on my face ... really great story ... :) oh and thanx for the songs ..i got them all ... i like them all :)) ... espacially Bif Naked - We Are The Lucky Ones and Jill Sobule - I Kissed A Girl ...
Posted by savi Nice story, very well written and different from the stories normally found in this site.
Keep it up.
Posted by Aimus oh wow. i feel exactly like jo right now. i can't imagine a story as incredible as the one i've just read. i cried man...and i never cry! this is really, truely, great and i can't thank you enough for writing it.
Posted by andrea you really hit the right button.this's definetely a wonderful story.i'm really tired of reading those stories that is full of fucking and sex.so,good job.hope you'll keep it up. p/s r u blueeyes101?ur stories sound awfully similiar like hers.
Posted by Diogo Ferreira , Portugal You should write a book..
Simply a cativating story... You just got a fan... and let me just say i'm a great admirer of this kind of writting so i'd be glad to read all the next creations you might have.. CONGRATULATIONS
Posted by Sid WOW! that was some story!
U know what, i am a guy and nothin, and i mean nothin turns me on than 2 lesbians kissing.KISSING that is.and only kissing , the way the tongues gruel and the lips lock, how it feels, i have tried it with my cousin and i feels awesome. It was so horny,that I made my cousin cum while kissing!i mean , we enjoyed it so much, it was like a wave coming over me. And then we fucked, but we didnt feel like doing it, and that after kissing for about 35mins straight. So we gave up fuckin and started oral sex. this was our first time practising oral sex with each other. We had had sex before and kissed atleast 10 times everyday but never had oral sex. So we tried it and when we didnt enjoy it much, we got back to kissing. and came again. So in short, i would say write some stories which talk about only wild kissing.
Posted by Sid WOW! that was some story!
U know what, i am a guy and nothin, and i mean nothin turns me on than 2 lesbians kissing.KISSING that is.and only kissing , the way the tongues gruel and the lips lock, how it feels, i have tried it with my cousin and i feels awesome. It was so horny,that I made my cousin cum while kissing!i mean , we enjoyed it so much, it was like a wave coming over me. And then we fucked, but we didnt feel like doing it, and that after kissing for about 35mins straight. So we gave up fuckin and started oral sex. this was our first time practising oral sex with each other. We had had sex before and kissed atleast 10 times everyday but never had oral sex. So we tried it and when we didnt enjoy it much, we got back to kissing. and came again. So in short, i would say write some stories which talk about only wild kissing.
Posted by Erica I thought this was absolutely GREAT....i didnt expect to read something like this on here....i really enjoyed every single minute of reading this...and i agree with you 100%....this story really touched me in more ways than you will know....me being a lesbian in this world today, i fully understand what its like and this story really hit close to home with me.
Posted by Amber That was great! Thats a great story!
Posted by Anne Absolutely phenomenal. This is a story I've come back to read many times, because there's so much more to it than just the sex. That's what I love about it. You should definitely write more. There's just not many REAL stories about lesbian relationships and about coming-out anxiety. You've also gotten me hooked on Jill Sobule.
Posted by Daniel Hey, great stories! I really loved them, you make me live the lives of your characters every time I read them. What's your email adress? I've tried contacting you, but Brand_New_Writer@yahoo.com apparently doesn't exist. Anyways, congradulations again.
Posted by christin alexis Please do a part 2 to this story its really cool to somewhat see like unfold through story.This was great!!
Posted by Hannah Wow wat a great story...I was moved...
Posted by Ourfirstkisledtothis I like this one a lot...Most of these stories go right into bumpin and grindin I am so into the story line...So yeah perfect keep it up I want to know more..
Posted by Daniel Well, as it shows above, I still haven't found a way of contacting you, but I still love your stories after years of reading and re-reading and re-re-reading them! I gave the URL to a forum I frequent and am trying to get other readers to take a look at your works. I know they'll love it if they take the initiative.
Posted by Elizabeth Smyth I loved this story- one of the few well written ones on here. Sorry it took me so long to say so. As a published writer myself I have to say that there were parts of it that were truely eloquent, the characters were engageing and had a lovely bitter-sweet ending. Very well done!
Posted by Gary Marley NIce love Story.
Posted by Achal Great Story!! I like it very much!
Posted by diamond omg i love it
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