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Avasa (Part I) reviews
Posted by ac & kay
o wow. that was amazing. fuck, you are amazing. shit, by the end of it, my girlfriend was sitting in my lap and i was holding her with the hope that i never had to let go. chop out the serious sex scenes, some of the language and send to to a movie director and you'll making a fortune, and, more importanly, spread the true meaning of our society to those who are to simple minded to understand. I used to think stories like moulin rouge, romeo and juliet and titanic were the greatest love stories ever written, but that just changed.
from me -ac- and my adorable girlfriend kay (love you sweetie!), we thankyou for putting the undying passion and reality of our world into words. Please continue writing!
Posted by brokenlilgirl
I am coming out of the closet and this was a wonderful story about what I dream a relationship will evolve into. It felt great to read that story and my thoughts hug on every word. Thanks!
Posted by brand new writer
First of all, good luck to ac and kay...hope you guys keep going strong. brokenlilgirl, I know how hard it is to come out of the closet, because I just went through it myself. Good luck to you too.brbr
I'm interested in getting serious feedback on a couple of things. What makes a great sex scene? What are you guys looking for when you read a sex scene?brbr
Me, personally, I'm not interested so much in the actual act which should be written in two paragraphs or less. The foreplay and the situation is what turns me on. The emotions and feelings of the characters are important. Interesting sexual scenarios like a bit of bondage or teasing help. The narrative itself should be believable and realistic (no impossible positions, please).brbr
Rough sex can also be a huge turn-on, although I'll admit that I'm squeamish about reading anything that's unconsensual or a little too dehumanizing for my liking (e.g. she said, "I'm going to tie you up to the bed and beat the shit out of you").brbr
Please do let me know what you people are interested in, so that I can try to incorporate that in my future writings. Thanks.
Posted by liz
yeah, from a lesbian perspective, a sex scene should definitely focus on the tenderness and intimacy, although yes, some novelties season the imagination a bit. which is why the scene you had was so excellent. good job- keep going the way you're going.
Posted by -ac-
foreplay, teasing and just after is what it's all about for me. impossible situations are just really stupid, and for it to be good there has to be enough character develpoment, love and trust, and for this to shine through to the physical part of a relationship. quite alot of people, my girlfriend for one, like to express themselves in bed, so make sure your characters have personalities and an emotional bond before sex. rushing into things makes doubt, uncomfterbility but with alot of foreplay and character devolpment you can just roll into your scene so the story becomes real. you seem to be able to do this very well. i myself am a writer as well only not in the erotic section, my stories have limited scenes ans are usually sencored as my goal is just to try to get people to understand lesbian relationships rather then turn them on, so concentrate heavly on foreplay and those few minutes after, and during those i let the characters i have developed be frre, 'cause in my mind that is what makes a true lesbian relationship. please, keep writing, ac.
Posted by ally
okay, first off let me say," i love you." and i dont even know who u are. This story makes me hot and bothered. I want to be the characters in this story. Oh my god I love this damn story. i printed it out and brought a copy to school to let some of my friends read. Ur the fucking greatest right now. Keep it up. U have a fan right here baby. Right here!
Posted by genie
i had actually read avasa somewhere else, but there was a chunk of it missing. so i went looking for it online and i found it here. i loved it so much, i read your other entries. i loved those so much, i went off in search of more stories on this site. so far, it has been a disappointment. they have all been too degrading, unrealistic, and not enough development outside the sex. i will not give up though. i hope to find some more writers here that can draw me into the story as well as you have. thank you so much for these. they are fantastic.
Posted by Sam
You could seriously sell your stories. or even just get them published in magazines.
Please get into contact with me.
I am all about Gay-Straight Allaince
I am also an Indian, never the less an indian who needs to go see 'Fire'
I dont wanna give my name out on this, but once I talk to you I will.
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