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A night at the beach reviews
Posted by Felicia
I like it when authors try to evoke emotion. Too many stories here are simply excuses to throw a lot of sexual imagery around. Characters become cardboard cutout caricatures of lust, without hopes, fears or dreams of their own. Thank you for being different.
I won't say your story is perfect--you've got to work on the grammar, particularly sentence structure--but I like that the simple story and the characters still shine through that. Camille "lived" for the length of the story a whole lot more vividly than 90% of the woman characters I've read in these stories.
Keep practicing, and please write more.
Posted by Trysha
First of all,thank you.
I'm glad you liked it. And then theres the fact that im french :)And i have a lot of trouble with english grammar.. but i know i have some work to do:)
Thank you for youre nice words, it means a lot.
I love writing...i guess it shows... and i will take youre good advice.. and i will write more!
One last time .. Thanks a bunch!
Posted by Jenny
SPELLING ERRORS!!!!!!!!! FIX THEM UP!!!!!!!! very erotic though.... i think i will go and make love with my own lover......... oh god........ fuck me harder!
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