Posted by Andie Mmmmmm, sounds fun I wish I could join.
Posted by LucOuarm The major problem is the non-stop action (which some readers may find just wonderful in such a short story. There were a few grammar nit-picks, but nothing really serious. Perhaps, already knowing that this was not your best effort, you should have put more time into it, working to improve over previous tales.
Posted by Oscar D This story was very good. I enjoyed the lesbian parts alot...and also liked the non stop sex action. I think this is a great story you should make lots more!!!!! :D
Posted by blue it's a great story i thought it was perfect
Posted by marv Good story. Really like how you go staight for the hot action.
Posted by David a little short for my taste, but still, very impressive. i just wish i was one of those lucky guys. :)