The Birthday reviews
I liked the story, BUT, this person REALLY needs to learn proper english. It was so hard to figure out what they wanted to say. Nice story, but, due to the bad english, I only gave it a 2.
I liked the story myself, byt PLEASE use spell check next time. It took quite a bit away from the story.
I agree with the first and second guy..... The story had a good line, but if you asked this person to spell ID, they'd have major trouble. Looks like ebonics.
learn to use the spell checker, dude
Good story! but if there was one thing wrong: USE A FUCKING SPELL CHECKER! IM SITTING HERE ON A FRIDAY NIGHT AFTER A EXAM, AND I DONT WANT TO FUCKING DECIPHER A PAPER. But beside that, it was pretty good
nice story man but with all those mispellings it lost something.try pressing that little icon that says spell check.
It WAS hard to figuer out, I only read about a pargraph and decided "Right, I'm gonig to spell check this fucking thing myself"! So I'm gona send the corrected version to the author. Hopefully they can get a READABLE version on the site
Very Nice story but hard to read, you need a spell checker badly.
this story suck balls...learn to spell, retard
this is a lovely first time, fuck story where's 2
I hope your still in school there are more misspelled words in this story then I could count
You need to improve on your spelling and grammar skills... i found it pretty hard to read... go back to school!
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Can' get past all the spelling and grammar problems. This story is unreadable. Get an editor.
ok the spelling wasn't that hard to work out, but what i'm more interested in is why are you using your grandmother's email?
You need to go thru and edit this thing so it is easier to read it was hard for me to read i because of all of the typos.
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