Stepson reviews

Terrible story, grammar was horrible, the dialog was bland, hopefully this is your first story, cause you got along way to go in order to become even a average author

Goddamn AOLer. This person can't even compete sentences. Just ramble, ramble ramble. It sucked!

I dont think there was one sentence in this entire story. I do agree, it was a waste of time. Better luck next time.

Apparently this was a first effort by someone who does not appear to be a native speaker of English. There are serious grammar amd punctuation errors, as already noted. Before another effort, please do some basic ground work in language skills.

The only thing i can say about this story is: Wtf? I dont care if your foreign or not. If you live in America, learn how to speak the damn language before writing a story.

this was sooo damn stupid

That was the hottest story i have ever fuck'n read my dick was rock hard the entire time and i am going home to fuck my girl right now