Some first times should happen all the fucking time reviews

I gave up half way through. Try sticking to one topic and stop wandering off with all the tangents. Even your reply to someone else's review was way too wordy. Cut to the chase and just write your story. Should you be descriptive? Yes... but this was WAY too much. Better luck next time.

this story sucks! what a waste of my time.

I too gave up after reading the first few paragraphs. You really should just get to the point, and not go on a long tangent on how nice this womens breasts looked.

hai

Stupid

LOUSY STORY DID NOT LIKE IT AT ALL

Don't listen to them. Your story was absolutely divine and I look forward to reading more of your work. There needs to be more people who can seduce with words alone.

Great story. didn't get me off, but was entertaining.

Wtf

VDuLDA Cool! That's a clever way of looking at it!