Seduction reviews

The terrible grammar and spelling in this story made me so upset that I couldn't even finish it...which is a shame, because the idea of brother/sister sex always gets my pussy nice and wet.

I'm no english teacher, but improper spelling, hideous grammar, run on sentences, comma splices, the list goes on. Did you even read this? It's incomprehensible. I had to read several sections multiple times to understand what was happening. Either learn how to write or don't write.

Could have been a great story but the grammar was atrocious.

ok here a few things to work on improper spelling, hideous grammar, run on sentences, comma splices, fragments ext. I could bairly get threw the whole thing and thast a shame because bro/sis always turns me on. If you ever write again at least use spell check ok. Other wise the story was ok for a beginer

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