My New Home...1 reviews

`I was totaly ensorbed into the story...just getting good...'N IT WAS LIKE HEARING SOMEONE TRYING TO OPEN THE DOOR...i WAS EXCITED 'n NO WAY TO FINSH OFF...WHERES REST OF THIS hot STORY AT...

Good story...quite a turn on...but where's the rest of it?

Honey, I'm sorry, but writing is not for you. Your grammar is terrible and you have no sense of timing. You admitted in the beginning that nothing like this has happened to you, so don't write about it. Don't write about tragedy that you have not lived through, it will always come out sounding trite and pretentious. You write as though English was a second language for you. I suggest you just stick to READING stories. Forget writing them. I'm sorry to be so harsh.

You have got my pussy dripping and lesbian willing to take my cum in there mouth and on there boobs