My 1st time ever reviews

Well it was a half hard story. Meaning that my cock only got half way up. It appears English is your second language. Keep working on it...it'll come along. Keep writing...and I'll keep reading...One day you may get the honor of a Full NUT!

Don't write in script format and don't write in present tense either. Plus it's really bad to go from 1st person to 3rd person in a story.

I didn't really like it... the format was weird and it needs A LOT of gramitical revision. Not really that much detail and was a little too short. Better luck next time.

not interested