Meryl and Alex. reviews

good development for the whole story. It wasn't rushed and it seemed to have good cohesion.

very nice.good build-up.didnt seem as rushed as most stories i read on this site.keep it up.

PARAGRPHS ARE TOO BIG! Think of your readers and how difficult it is to bang into that wall of text.

GOOD STORY BUT IT HAVE NO END i MEAN IT WOULD HAVE BEEN BETTER IF THEY INCLUDE THE SISTER FRIENDS IN THE STORY YOU THE OTHER GIRLS COME IN WITH OUT KNOCKING AND ALL GET IT ON OR SOMETHING LIKE THAT SORRY i DO NOT SEE THE MEAN OF MENTION IN THE STORY ABOUT ANOTHER PEOPLE IF YOU ARE NOT GOING TO USE IT IN THE STORY LINE.APART OF THAT GREAT STORY