Capturing My Sister reviews

hahaha!! hey man, lovin the fact that they just started fucking with a dead bodey in the room and a bunch of blood all over Heather. Hehe, I think the story needs a little work on the details, expecualy the sex scene. It needs to make sense without the guy/girl readin it to think to hard about it. It could be a very very good story if you put some work into it. and really man you dont need to overexplain what the character is saying as there saying it. Have them talking like a normal conversation would happen. please dont be discouraged, it is good, potentualy atleast. Good luck next time!