At Uncle Jason's reviews

Learn to spell! You must be an AOLuser. It's break, not brake.

this really sucked. learn how to write. are you trying for first person or third? chose one and stick with it

Just about the worst story I have ever read!!!! Spelling, point of view and story line are all very poorly thought out. You really need to get your story straight! Who are you supposed to be? Are you the man or the woman? Anyways besides all this grammatical stuff I could not finish your story! Try again and then proof read your story to make some sense!

if you would correct your spelling mistakes and learn to use proper grammer , I might be able to stay interested in your story, as it is I couldn't make it past the first paragraph