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Posted by Felicia Harper
Wow. Nearly perfect. Good descriptions of the settings and emotions going on. You hit just about all the right points, especially the woman's angst over cheating on her husband. If anything, I would emphasize that even more. Don't say that she wishes she wasn't married. No, this woman loves her husband and loves being married to him. Let her feel even more guilty.
Your descriptions were, for the most part, quite good, with care for evoking the picture rather than simply writing up a police report with foul language. The one thing I would try to do better here is to get a bit less physical. Sex is a mystical experience for most people. The way a woman feels when she builds up to orgasm is much more than just a "familiar twinge". Use a bit of simile and metaphor if need be. Don't try to describe the sensations; instead, for instance, try to think of how an orgasm might look, perhaps a soft, pulsing wash of light and heat. The one thing I recall that kind of turned me off was when you said she "deep-throated" him. It's like kissing him, groping him, or humping him: it's a general description. Instead, try describing the action, how it feels to both of them as she tilted her head back to let him slide past her tongue, carefully quelling a flinch of panicked choking as the head touched the back of her throat. Also, "the smell of her wantonness" leaves me feeling confused. Try another description.
The story seemed to run a bit longer than it probably needed to. You might want to either up the intensity level as you get toward the middle, building up the tension of desire between them, or give the reader something to maintain the attention level. One idea that comes to mind is having the woman fantasize about Clark while she and her husband are having sex. She would probably feel more guilty afterwards, too.
Above average to good scoring on all the rest of the Harper hang-ups. You get a Fell Harper score of nine orgasms out of ten.
Posted by Master-Knight
The story is long and passion filled and WORTH IT. Ths is a tale you could give to your girlfriend or wife and even she would become aroused.
Posted by Bill R.
I liked it alot - a slow gradual build to a wonderful climax! As good sex should be.
It is strangely reminisent of a trip I once took with some friends to Atlanta...
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