Posted by Krista very good at the beginning, but look's like you got bored in the end. Too bad story was cumming along well. Until the end that is.
Posted by LucOuarm TOO-BIG paragraphs made this hard to read. Each new speaker should generate a new paragraph. I agree with the previous review; I think you tried to do too much and ran out of non-repetive ideas.
Posted by SEVERUSMAX I really enjoyed this story, since that prick John had it coming to him! If he wanted to have an open marriage, that's fine, but monopolizing the fun (even orally) is just no damn good! The end was for me the very best part, since the idea of a group marriage is the sexiest concept in the world as far as I'm concerned!